Script Read Through - Change Draft 1

Edited by Sneha

Script - Change 1st Draft

Treatment

Script To Screen - Jigsaw

This is our script to screen analysis for the short independent film Jigsaw.

Script to Screen from Aperture Productions

Sneha: Mise en scene, What will this exercise make me think about when you write your script?

Kanaiya: Editing, Soundtrack, Explain what you would have done differently in the production and post production if you were working with that script.

Jay: Screening, what will this exercise make you think about when you are in production and post production?

Pitch: Treason

LOGLINE: A spy, sets out on a mission to stop an assassination but the challenges he faces are life-threatening. Will he give in?

HEAD ON: Consists of storyline outline, types of shots that may be used to convey certain messages along with the type of suspenseful, thrill-seeking music that could be used.



PITCH:



FEEDBACK:

This is the feedback that I received based on my pitch. It was helpful and I was able to learn how to improve my pitching skills and how my story could be further developed to make it clearer and more understandable.

Pitch: Change

LOGLINE: After discovering the identity of an infamous serial killer, the renowned and expert detective is killed, leaving his partner, a newly promoted detective, to do the impossible and piece everything together to solve the case while dealing with the loss of this idol and changes in his life.

HEAD ON: A series of images to give an idea of the overall feel, complimented with an outline of the story. It also features music that is similar to what could be used in the opening while also detailing little specific aspects that can also be used.



PITCH:

Pitch: Different Identities

LOGLINE: Twins, separated at birth, followed different pathways in their lives. In a journey of a renowned Detective to find a renowned criminal, will their paths ever meet?

HEAD-ON: Consists of background non diegetic music we could expect, which would be synchronous, and types of frames in relation to the plot of my movie, which would contain a high amount of mystery and even confusion.



PITCH:




FEEDBACK from CLASS:

This feedback was useful because it allowed me to realise where I went wrong and how I could adapt my story to make it less confusing.

Random Story Game

This is the random story game that we played in order to "get our creative juices flowing". This helped us think about our potential story line and how we would adapt to different scenarios.


Edited by Kanaiya

Additional Research - Sneha

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Secret Intelligence Service - Student Opening Analysis:

WWW:

• The background non-diegetic synchronous music works well with the genre and it builds suspense.
• The addition of news reports adds verisimilitude.
• In some parts, the handheld camera was successful at portraying the nervousness the character is feeling.
• The panning and establishing shots were successful at showing the location.
• The costume (suit) matched the role of the character.

EBI:

• The opening credits were shown for longer.
• The lighting in some parts could have been brighter to reduce the blurriness.
• In some parts, the handheld camera was not successful. It made it look like the main character was being watched even when he wasn't. Made the audience feel uneasy.
• There could have been more short cuts to make the action appear faster. This could've been enhanced with fast-paced editing.

Additional Research - Kanaiya

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Feedback of other student's work:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iMQR_pPHOWg

WWW: Good use of micro elements, typography is matches the genre, location helps to create an atmosphere, good transition between scenes, good use of conventions of a title sequence

EBI: storyline wasn’t so stereotypical, if the pace was more fast paced, if there was more dialogue for audience to engage with, if characters were introduced quicker

Additional Research - Jay

The importance of music.

Music is extremely important and can decide whether a movie is good or not. Music helps build up impressions and feelings throughout the movie. Softer slower music can instil a calm feeling but can also be seen as sad depending on the images that accompany it. Music itself can be split into several small factors:

Pace - The speed.
Pitch - The degree of highness or lowness of a tone.
Dynamics - Volume and the feel (soft or hard).

Using these elements in combination together gives unlimited possibilities. Slow music, paired with high pitched and quiet notes can help create an ominous feel. While fast paced high pitched notes can give a happy feeling.
For our opening we want to encapsulate the idiom "the calm before the storm". We decided that it should include both the calm as well as the storm. Because of this we decided that our music should crescendo and include a variety of instruments. We want to create texture and have a plethora of layers that start off calm but build up to create that storm.

Job Roles - Sneha

Job Roles - Kanaiya

Job Roles - Jay

Target Audience Research

Edited by Sneha

We created this video for our target audience research. From this information, we were able to learn about what stood out the most in a title sequence. We were also able to find out how different micro-elements (particularly sound) would have an impact on the moods and atmosphere. It will assist our initial ideas and planning because we will be able to go more into depth with the films that they said were the most iconic. Finally, we will be able to make the title sequence appeal to the target audience by using conventions that worked from other movies for our own title sequence development.

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